Board Thread:General Discussion/@comment-25389622-20141101150445/@comment-24199126-20150111213103

Well, we've already settled the use of "battalion", but if company is really an issue, then it can be changed to "his men" or "squad". I am just of the opinion that we need not change words unless there's a legitimate reason. And saying "when you hear battalion, you think of large group of men" is not a legitimate reason since the whole reason we're having this debate is I didn't see it that way.

You didn't put that; what I'm saying is that as the subject of the sentence, Marshmallow is the one causing the spikes to erupt; his roar should not even be a factor because the "causing" modifies Marshmallow, not his roar.

The previous sentence says "realizing it was them or her", which says Elsa was pressed to fight. "Realizing it was them or her, Elsa was pressed to fight" is a tautology.

It's not an important detail. Putting "The other thug was disarmed by Elsa, who launched a surprise attack, and followed up by generating walls of ice to prevent the thug's escape" is awkward phrasing. The bit about the surprise attack is a parenthetical statement, which means it can be removed and the sentence still carries its meaning: Elsa attacked the guard. The fact it was a surprise attack isn't important to the flow of the narrative, which involves Elsa defeating the guards.

Additionally, it's not a surprise attack. How can the other thug not be expecting anything after seeing his fellow pinned to the wall with ice spikes? He even raises his crossbow in those moments. Elsa reacts fast and might have surprised the guard with her speed, but he certainly gave an indication he was expecting something. I know this will be a point of contention, which brings me back to my original point: It's not needed anyway. Elsa attacked the guards, simple as that.

Also, in the Arendelle castle guards summary, I meant to put "Unneeded comma + ...". Just a heads-up.