Thread:Heimr Arnadalr/@comment-25389622-20150519155125/@comment-26102520-20150520214336

How is not a great reason? We want the wiki to sound sharp, so articles that lack proper flow make us appear less than professional, which I think we can both agree is not ideal.

I've said how it's poorly written: poor flow. I've explained this to you before, but I guess I'll try again. What occurs is described in the article, yes, but it's done so very rigidly. It's just a giant mess of "this happened, then this, then this." This is particularly evident in this section:


 * Elsa and Anna then headed into the village on their hunt for presents. It was here that they encountered Oaken, who offered Elsa a remedy for her cold. Elsa then conducted a group of children in the village square who sang for Anna. At the castle, Kristoff, Sven and Olaf continued to defend the cake.


 * As the sun was setting, Elsa then lead Anna to the clock tower. At this point Elsa was particularly feverish, and Anna grew more concerned. As they climbed Elsa was in delirium, and at the top she spun around a wooden beam and was about to fall, if not for Anna's timely intervention. The day had finally caught up with Elsa, and after admitting that she had a cold, the sisters headed back to the castle."'''

I could point out how the diction is also not great, but baby steps.