Board Thread:General Discussion/@comment-25389622-20141101150445/@comment-25389622-20150111015055

1. Yes, I thought so :-) I may change it to be more specific, though I may not. It's not too much of a worry.

2. I wouldn't say that the Arendelle guards would try that. You saw their faces when they entered the palace. Also, they have more of a connection with Elsa yan the Duke's men, and would most likely be less inclined to do such a thing, at least on a personal whim. "I brought you back so the Duke's men didn't kill you, even though I already prevented the one pinned to the wall from killing you." Yes, but they could try and kill her again, was my reasoning. The journey back must have been awkward. I wonder if the Duke's men were imprisoned as well.

3. Ah, I see that it says that now, so it's fine. Most likely idiomatic, as you say.

4. Yep, I get that now :-)

5. No, I just meant that you say sink in the respectable tense one too many times, and it just sounded odd. You've changed it now though, I see. And it has nothing to do with being comfortable; you make me sound as if I am crazy and am intimidated by the word sink appearing too many times at once xD

6. I still think that "smiling at his impending triumph" sounds better. I wouldn't say that it sounds too awkward. And it doesn't quite carry the same meaning, hence my point. As you say, "Hans hasn't killed Elsa yet..." So he's not yet triumphed. He's triumphed in his other goals leading up to that, yes, but he's not there yet. "smiling in triumph over killing Elsa" And gosh, that's completely wrong! His triumph is conditional on killing Elsa, which he does not. So I would still say that the word impending is necessary.

7. Yeah, we're agreed that this point wasn't necessary for Hans.

8. Yes, but they travelled to the North Mountain. But again, who knows for sure how they knew to go there. Maybe they had seen the palace from afar. More like stared it up ;-) If you look closely, frame by frame, I think that there is a sense of awe there. I wouldn't say that he wasn't impressed.

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<p style="margin-top:12pt;line-height:16.5pt;"><span style="font-size:10.5pt;font-family:Helvetica,sans-serif;">9. "His troops" sounds too possessive. "He and the troop" perhaps. What do you want to do?

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<p style="margin-top:12pt;line-height:16.5pt;">I have also made a little video to ilustrate my "concurrent" point. How do you want it?