Board Thread:General Discussion/@comment-25389622-20141101150445/@comment-24199126-20150111022000

2. Still too uncertain. I think it's best to leave it as Hans said it. It's similar to how we are unsure about who "they" referred to when Hans said "don't be the monster they fear you are." Could be guards ... could be citizens ... could be both. Besides, the Duke's guards aren't even a factor for the rest of the film, there's no reason to be mentioning them when they aren't mentioned.

6. I'm going to have to strongly disagree. "Smiling savagely at his impending triumph" is longer than it has to be. And no, it's a bit extreme to be saying "that's completely wrong". Hans effectively succeeded when he sentenced Elsa to death and by virtue of that alone, so long as it wasn't said "smiling in triumph over killing Elsa", there's no reason to say "impending triumph". But in the interests of avoiding a long debate, I'm simply removing the triumph bit completely since, for all we know, Hans could have been smiling at the thought of spilling blood.

8. I wouldn't say impressed, he looked more ... "aware" of the scope of Elsa's power. In any case, the wording "the spectacle that was Elsa's ice palace" sounds too out-of-universe.

9. I don't see anything wrong with leaving the possessive form. I can say "his friends", but it doesn't necessarily imply leadership or ownership over the group. Additionally, Hans does gather the guards, and they clearly responded to his command to not harm Elsa, indicating leadership on his part anyway.

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