Thread:Dragonboy6491/@comment-25389622-20150412221500/@comment-25389622-20150419115149

Right, thanks for getting back to me nonetheless. I know that you're busy :-) It won't be long and it will all be over, then we can settle back in to our Frozen-rich lives again :-)

I've taken in all that you have said. Thank you for taking the time to explain. I still think that the assault page could do with a bit of trimming; I know that it only discusses the event and the duels as it were, but it doesn't need to be as detailed as the character history pages which it is at the moment.

I've looked over over Anna's birthday again and taken out a lot of the excess detail, but it probably could still do with some refining. I'll have another look. I'm trying to limit my time on here so that I can get on with revision and stuff. I think that it's working :P

So here's my thinking for the events pages. We include details of what characters do that are relevant to the event, and definitely include detail in how they influence the event. Stuff like Elsa and Anna talking, that's what needs to be said, not loads of detail because that is covered on their history sections. The page is about the event, but the characters are what make the event, Elsa more than anyone. So it is necessary to talk about her in so much detail - again, linking back to the influence that a character has on an event.

The last thing I shall note is about images. You did a good job with those ones. My only issue is the isolation one. It's just a bit dark, but then that was intended as the doors were closed, shutting out the light. Though I think that we will be pushed to find a better one seeing as there are few good images that portray that page in a single picture. Also, I didn't mean to say "temporary isolation"... Derp. I meant temporary opening or something of the sort, maybe temporary end to the isolation. In my experience with the coronation, I wrote on the previous image how Elsa was crowned queen in the chapel, but Heimr changed it to say that the coronation took place in the chapel (Actually, thinking about that, the coronation is the whole day, so that isn't strictly true anyway). All I am saying is that you've wrote something similar to what I did, so I'm not sure if Heimr will dispute that. My thinking with images is that they should show the event; Elsa being crowned basically is the event. The later image in the article does the job of capturing the rest of the event, the guests and the party. Also, is the Great Thaw page too short to show Elsa beginning to thaw Arendelle? I liked that picture :-)

I'll just say about the transcripts and my experience with them. In Britain we have this thing in parliament called Hansard, which is a record of all the talks in parliament since the late 1800's. Now as you can imagine in such an environment there is a lot of bustle and distraction; the person talking will not always be clear in how they say a sentence. So what the people behind the scenes do is they alter the wording so that it means exactly the same thing, just without the "ums" and "ahs" and such. The same goes for the "ands" too. Sure she says and a lot, but excluding some of them doesn't change what she is saying. And the line: "That was just kind of fun bit to... For the girls together". That's not really a sentence, and its inclusion is questionable. But I shall leave that based on what you have said about it being encyclopedic to include all that is said.

Hope that our chats can resume soon :-) My exams start in mid-May, so after that I'll have all the time in the world.