Board Thread:General Discussion/@comment-25389622-20141101150445/@comment-24199126-20150111005026

1. I put "avoided another one of Marshmallow's blows"; that covers the fist.

2. It could be the Duke's men, but it also could have been the guards. We don't know. Besides, Hans was answering Elsa's question about why she was brought to Arendelle. With your reasoning, Hans would be answering "I brought you back so the Duke's men didn't kill you, even though I already prevented the one pinned to the wall from killing you."

3. Hmm, grammatically, I don't see anything particularly wrong with "scowl one's displeasure", but I suppose it could be an idiomatic thing. Nothing wrong with changing it to "scowling with displeasure", I suppose.

4. Whiteout is an actual noun referring to a blizzard.

5. I believe "sunk" is the past participle of "sink", so in that instance "sank" is appropriate. However, it's interchangeable in American English. But I can change it to "sank in" if it'll make you comfortable.

6. He hasn't succeeded yet, so "smiling at his impending triumph" is appropriate. I just found it too awkward due to length, so I shortened the sentence since it carries the same meaning. Sure, Hans hasn't killed Elsa yet, but he's triumphed in the sense that he has lured her out and has her in a position where he can finish her off. If it said, "smiling in triumph over killing Elsa", it'd be wrong and your wording takes precedence.

7. I don't always remove stuff that other people add; very frequently, I correct myself :). So all that red you see, could very well have been my own additions. I've changed it further to focus on Hans even more.

8. North Mountain is unnecessary since Hans was focused on the ice palace. And as for the spectacle, the way it was phrased took it out of context; by saying "the spectacle that is Elsa's ice palace", it sounds too out-of-universe. Additionally, while the guards appeared to marvel at the ice palace, Hans more or less just stared it down.

9. Troop and troops are both acceptable here, so it matters naught. A troop is a group of soldiers while troops refer to soldiers that are in a group. However, I would like to note that your reasoning that troop is more acceptable based on the fact that the possessive implies Hans being their leader falls flat, since in both instances, they would imply that. His "group of soldiers" still belongs to Arendelle. Still, changing it was more of an oversight on my part, so I apologize.