Board Thread:General Discussion/@comment-25389622-20141101150445/@comment-25389622-20141209191525

Ah, OK, that's all fine. Just a lot of red is all, but the context was still there :-) I'll have to keep telling myself to focus on the two characters at hand, and not deviate away from them and their interactions.

A few things with what you've done to Sven's rewrite.

I don't think that Sven appears to swallow it; he holds it in his mouth, so you could say that Olaf inferred that he had swalloed it.

I'd like to change "foolong around" to something more formal.

Is it necessary to say that they skated on the ice rink, because they aren't interacting from what we see, so it's kind of redundant to the article.

If I went ahead and changed it, and then you looked it over?

Clr is quite useful :-) I've figured it out now. What does it stand for?